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    The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Sat Aug 29, 2009 12:19 pm

    Hola all.

    Im putting together a horror movie.
    Called the Unforgiven. To give a JezLive first look into it, im gonna put the notes we have for it on the website and update it all ass we go.

    Basic Plot:

    Trait Valentine, an orphan has been pushed over the edge by a bunch of bullies. He decides to let his fists fix everything. His actions fail and he gets a bad hit to the head, killing him on the spot.

    The Bullies freaked out and fled the scene. They had just committed murder. After running, they came to their senses and they had to return to help. They returned to the scene, to see nothing but a pool of the blood, and his necklace he wore.
    What was symbolic of this Necklace?

    The bullies assumed he was alive and he too, had fled. But boy were they wrong.
    The bullies went on with there lives, thinking they have been forgiven for what they did, and pretended nothing happened. To never mention it again.

    But really, they weren't forgiven. Not at all. One by one, in a serious of events, Trait haunted, and killed everyone who stood they're watching and laughing as he died. Then finally, finishing off the bully who punched him.

    The Unforgiven. Directed By Brett Sullivan
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Sat Aug 29, 2009 12:37 pm

    Characters: Brett - Trait Jessica - Janie Zelene – Keira Tim - Blaine Jesse - Colt Tayler -Jack Jake- Frankie

    Traits Dialog

    Ever been pushed so far over the edge that it seems your only choice
    is to fight? You never did anything to hurt anyone. You never asked
    For any of this to happen. And yet there are people out there who want
    to ruin your life. Why do they do it to me? I want them to stop. With
    Bullies, you know reasoning and talking doesn't work. All that's left
    is your fists you do the job. So that's what did. I confronted my
    Enemies. But did I really think it would solve anything? Did I really
    think I could win?

    I released my rage. My fists went left and right. I think I hit one
    guy. I'm not sure coz straight after I tasted blood. I looked down at
    my hands and there was a pool of it surrounding me. Everything
    blurred. I heard laughter. I was done yet. Or maybe I was. My body was
    falling slowly and heavily to th ground. Red became all I could see.
    And then only black.

    "oh my god, man he is dead! Why did you do that for!? We are gonna get
    in so much trouble. Let's get out of here!!"

    "no one finds out what happened here otherwise I'll say it was you. We
    gotta do something about the retard."

    They turned around to look for My corpse. All they found was my
    necklace in the sea of my blood.

    "ha the little turd ran off. Good. We showed him who's boss. He will
    know better next time we try to fight us"

    I couldn't let tune get away with what they did to me. They need to be
    punished. I will judge them! Now that I'm resurrected I finally have
    the chance to get then. My name is trait Valentine. I am a ghost. And
    I have one mission.

    Revenge.


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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Sat Aug 29, 2009 12:39 pm

    Death Scenes
    Keira

    Keira just came home from a long day. The night is dark. And the only light, is coming from the lanturne off Keira house. Keira is in the middle of a phone call, she has a full, shopping bag in her left hand, and her keys to the house in her right. She is holding the phone between her head and her shoulder.
    'Im almost inside, just hold up'. She says to the person on the phone. She goes to put the keys in the whole and the phone slips from her shoulder, landing on the ground, smashing away. She bends down and picks up the parts of the phone. She stands back up, and attempts to put the key back in the keyhole, to unlock the door, when in the glass door, she sees a reflection of Trait, standing behind her. He smiles to her. But before she gets a chance to turn around, he smashes her head into the door, Killing her on the spot.


    Melanie

    Melanie is standing in font of her mirror in her stereotypical, female room. The lights are all on, and she has her ipod blasting music in her ears. She is dancing and sing out loud into the mirror. When the lights flicker, Melanie yells ‘Get lost Robert!’ She screams at the door. Suddenly the music from her ipod stops. ‘Stupid technology’ and she chucks the ipod onto her bed. Suddenly the lights turn off again, but this time, they stay off a little longer. ‘Robert, I won’t say it again. Go down stairs and play with your friends!’ The lights flash back on. And Trait is standing infront of Melanie. Melanie screams out loud. Trait Watches, as Melanie chokes to death. Trait stands there with a big smile, on his face. Melanie falls face down onto her bed. Trait tucks her into her bed sheets.


    Blaine

    Its a dark night, the only light coming in the room is from the moonlight. Its late. Blaine is sound asleep. A shadow of a figure, increasingly starts showing over Blaines bedsheets. Blaine starts groaning in pain, as if he is feeling really unconfortable. He begins to shake, by every second, he gets worse and worse.
    Trait stands there smiling, just watching, just as Blaine did when Trait died. Blaines shake turns into a full body spazm, and eventually stops. Blaines Eyes and Mouth wide open.
    Yet so still.
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Sat Aug 29, 2009 12:43 pm

    Colts Death

    It's begining to get dark. It's only about 7pm. Colt is outside his
    house with a rope, tying down the roof. A storm is coming, and when it
    hits there will be havock. The bottom of the rope suddenly wraps
    around his feet. He feels a force push him down. Suddenly two dirty
    bare feet meet his eyes. A figure bends down which he recognizes
    to be trait. 'i wanna play a game' says trait. Smirking an evil
    grin. 'You are my game.' suddenly a hand covers colts eyes.

    Colt could not scream for help. He couldn't feel anything. All he
    could see was black.

    Slowly colt sees a light. Everything is blurt but he can make out some
    images.
    Colt looks around realizing he is hanging by a rope from a roof. The
    storm is getting darker. Everything is getting cold. You can see the
    frost in colts breath as he breaths heavier and heavier each time.
    Colt starts to squirm. Trait stands there, just watching. Colts limbs
    are slowly getting ripped from his sockets. Colt is crying in pain.
    He. Can taste the salt from his sweat, lathered around his face. It's
    dripping in his eyes. Stinging in pain. 'im sorry trait' trait just
    continues smirking into colts eyes.

    (Cut Scene)

    'What more do you want from me?' colt asked trait. 'i said I'm sorry'
    trait continued smirking away. Trait come closer to colt and the knot
    if the rope fell loose. Colt fell to the floor. He was comepletly
    drained of all energy. Colt just laid there movementless. Colt
    attempted to stand but fell back. He was facing upright. Staring
    straight into the stormy sky. Trait stood next to him just continuing
    to smirk. A bright light came from colt's face, and then a strong
    mist began floating out of his face, a very distorted image came out
    of colt. He was splitting away from his body. 'Stop please' pleaded
    colt. Trait kneeled down beside colt and closed colts eyes. Trait then
    raised and walked off, not looking back. A big distorted figure of
    mist rose from colts body spreading out into the air. Crack went the
    thunder in the night sky. The real storm was here.


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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Sat Aug 29, 2009 12:53 pm

    Character Biography

    Trait Valentine
    An Orphaned child. His mother and father died when Trait was 1. They left him with a necklace, which with the Necklace, he can feel his mother and father. Trait is a very vengeful person. He is very ignorant and stubborn. He has no friends. He is a loner.

    He comes across very dark, and everyone is to afraid to talk to him.

    Colt
    The 'leader' of the bullies. He is the one that always picks on everyone. He is the trouble maker. He has no sympathy for anyones feelings. He is quite athletic.

    Blaine
    A quiet kid. One of the bullies, but just watches everything that happens. He never hurts anyone, just watches and laughs.

    Frankie
    Tends to shadow Colt. He likes to pick on the other kids who are not as superior as he is.

    Jack
    Colts main man. He fights everything, along side Colt. Everything Colt does, so does 'Bakers Character'.

    Kiera
    A ditsy girl. Thinks she is more important then anyone. 'Blaines Girl'.

    Melanie
    Also Ditsy, she likes to hang with the crowd.
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Jeza on Sun Aug 30, 2009 6:33 am

    How long do you think until you will get this completed?
    I can help with editing if you need me to.

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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by MP on Sun Aug 30, 2009 8:59 am

    Really nice Brett.

    I'll be glad to help.

    So do you know when'll ull start filming?
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Sun Aug 30, 2009 1:52 pm

    I will be hoping to get the script completed this week. I just gotta wait for the weather. Im gonna release it on October 31st. Smile So those months will give me time to put together scores and stuff. Editing help can me useful. Big project. Im hopefully looking for it to be around 10-15 minutes. Smile
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Tue Sep 01, 2009 7:46 am

    Jack's Death


    The night very quiet. There is a cold feeling in the air. It's a full moon and the moonlight casts shadows everywhere. Jack has noticed an increase in the rubbish bin so he decides to take it out.

    Outside he approaches the red lidded bin and puts the garbage away. As he turns back to go inside he hears a rattling noise from inside the bin. He reopens the bin to find it just they way he left it."fucking rodents" He closes the bin lid and walks away. Another noise cones from in the bin. "what the fuck?" says Jack, turning around to reopens the bin. As he opens the lid a hand reaches out grabbing his arm. Jack jumps back with a whelp. He looks down into the bin to see trait, glaring up at him. "time to take out the trash" mocks trait.
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:58 pm

    Frankie came home from a long working day. He is feeling a little hungry. He cracks open the fridge and pulls out some tonatoes. In a small kitchen there isn't much space to move around but frankie is a small sized man. He insert the knife into the tomato. Just as he did he heard a craking sound from behind him. An old wooden door was slowly opening. He ignored the noise and continued cutting the tomatoes. The sink turned on and began filling up. Fredie turned around and turned it off. "this is just too werid" murmered Frankie. The fridge door opened. Just as all lights turned off. The fridge creating the only light in the room. Frankie walked over to the fridge. All was normal. "Valentine." Frankie murmered to himself. Frankie turned around with his head down, following the only light he could see. Frankie noticed a pair of dirty feet before him. Frankie looks upwards and sees nothing but a mysterious abyss of darkness. Frankie began to panic. He turned around to walk in the kitchen light. And behind him...

    There stood Trait Valentine

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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by MP on Thu Sep 03, 2009 11:42 am

    Ill be happy to help u film this as well
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    Re: The Unforgiven Files

    Post by Brett on Thu Sep 03, 2009 2:37 pm

    I could do with an few assistant directors. xD xD

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